Writing- First impression of the planet (paragraph)

 

Today you are writing about when you had stepped of the space shuttle and arrived on Pandora.

Don't forget you are writing about something that has already happened.

Step1: think about your senses. What did it look, feel, smell, sound like: make sure your paragraph has the following questions answered!

   

•    What did it look like?
•       What did feel like?
•      What did it sound like?
•      What did it smell like What can you hear?

Don't forget!

Here, is an example of the start of a paragraph I have written.

I have used some of the following in my sentences (in red),can you?